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Default Critiiiique please?   #1  
...Why am I even asking for critique on a rage drawing. -headdesk-

WILL UPDATE WHEN/IF I DRAW MORE STUFFS.

Anyways. This guy. Named him Jesper perhaps becuase I was secretly listening to Jesper Kyd's music in class. Shh. But I need critique on anatomy, details, and such, whether he has a good design, etc.

That kind of stuff.

It's not that clean irl. I jsut adjusted the scanner setting to low gamma and all. You might have to right-click and view image for the full-size.

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Old Posted 03-28-2012, 12:46 AM Reply With Quote  
Default   #2   Tiva Tiva is offline
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The ab's are a bit off but it looks really good!
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...-laughing ass off again-

Yeah, didn't plan his midriff out too well, did I XD
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Old Posted 03-28-2012, 01:48 AM Reply With Quote  
Default   #4   momo the peachy momo the peachy is offline
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It looks epic :)
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Old Posted 03-28-2012, 09:01 AM Reply With Quote  
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☪ஐﻬ☽ I'm not sure what kind of critiques I could give you
Espy. But he looks really good. I love his
design~




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Default   #6   Renata Renata is offline
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Old Posted 03-29-2012, 03:58 AM Reply With Quote  
littl3chocobo littl3chocobo is offline
isn't that funny
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i can only see three notable things, one, the far foot is rather pointed and underdeveloped, maybe give it a little more shape to match the others? and two, the sword/hand, the way he is holding his arm and gripping he has no weight being applied but the sword is very large, at a rough angle to balance and is most likely quite heavy, maybe you could either show him exerting a little more effort or else move/change the sword to match the lax hold. the third is the same arm >>; that line in the elbo should not be there, it makes it look as if the arm is pointing away from the viewer(that is we can see the back of the elbow not the inside of the arm)
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Default   #8   Dorian Pavus Dorian Pavus is offline
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Right off I saw the abs, they don't work like that in real life.
But its hard for me to type stuff like this out so I'll just draw out a help thing. Don't take my word as gospel, I'm still in 200 lvl art classes so I'm just getting the hang of things. ; p
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-trying to control laughter at the smiley face-

-cough- OKAY. Okay. I'm fine.

Ah, yeah. After finished, my friends and I stood back, looked at it, and wondered "...Um. How the hell do his pants stay on?" I think I lined something wrong there, and then decided to just go with it >.>

Those fingers. They weren't planned out, and I'd already drawn the hilt before I got to the hand. (Told my friends to remind to sketch in pencil and not in pen the next time I tried something like this.)

Thanks for the reference pic. -downloads-

....You have a tanto. You have a tanto?!
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Old Posted 04-04-2012, 08:56 PM Reply With Quote  
Default   #10   littl3chocobo littl3chocobo is offline
isn't that funny
you should do an update with corrections~
Old Posted 04-04-2012, 09:03 PM Reply With Quote  
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Can't; the whole thing is done in pen. Will be using that for future reference, though.
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Default   #12   Dorian Pavus Dorian Pavus is offline
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Yea. : D
Its my only sword at the moment.
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-foams- I'm a sucker for sharp bladed objects >.>
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Old Posted 04-05-2012, 12:33 AM Reply With Quote  
Default   #14   Dorian Pavus Dorian Pavus is offline
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So am I. xD
I love Japanese blades the most, thought cool knives get me too. ; )
Old Posted 04-05-2012, 02:22 AM Reply With Quote  
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My friend bought throwing knives yesterday >.> All I have is a Swiss Army knife and a "Swiss Army Card". Those're the only two actualy blades I have, but then there's that pretty awesome imitation shortsword (my dad's) that I...uh...

...accidentally dented a bit mock-sparring with a kid. I'm a bit pissed at myself for that.
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Old Posted 04-05-2012, 02:26 AM Reply With Quote  
Default   #16   Rosekitten Rosekitten is offline
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I can say it looks really good ^^ the only real complaint is the mid section, but people have already pointed out things there :3 so I'm not going to repeat advice already given hehe.

Practice makes perfect ^^
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