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Musings of Espy. Potentially best served with rueful solipsistic laughter. No longer updated on front page.
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Old Posted 10-03-2010, 12:31 AM Reply With Quote  
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This one I did for school. Hehe~ Bonus points for guessing which poet I'm imitating.

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Old Posted 10-03-2010, 12:31 AM Reply With Quote  
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Creative Writing class stuff:

worlds. (Had to include three words chosen from a classmate's list of favorite words.)

"worlds" was meant to be read in one breath and really quickly. Unfortunately my teacher didn't quite like my tongue's speeding.


little lies. (For this one, we took one line from a classmate from the above exercise and used it as the first of a six-line poem.)


underwater. (A "response" to Sharon Olds's "The One Girl at the Boys Party", written from a different point of view.)

it's got a cubic shit-ton of math references, almost one on every line.

Punch (Much different from my usual poetry. We had to take a cliche, chosen at random, and create a poem revolving around it. This one's not as dark as the others, and silly bordering on ridiculous. It's got a tacky rhythm too. More practice with alliteration and assonance.)


masks (Written for a slam poetry competition in the CWrit class. It's a group poem, hence the three-line series.)
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Old Posted 10-03-2010, 12:33 AM Reply With Quote  
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War


tomorrow (based off and quoting from Macbeth; done as an impromptu response to Funkduder's poems, haha...)
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Old Posted 10-03-2010, 12:33 AM Reply With Quote  
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Eehhhh.
Someone wanna critique?
Old Posted 10-29-2010, 11:37 PM Reply With Quote  
Default   #6   Ashy Ashy is offline
Be afraid.
i like the first one :o
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Old Posted 12-30-2010, 07:32 PM Reply With Quote  
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I agree, the first one is nice
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-kicks the thread- Updated. Will add more later.
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Person, what Person?
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I liked "Worlds" and "Little Lies" Tried two different speeds on "Worlds" and thought it sounded better when read slowly.
Puppy to Asami
Gallagher is Nursy~
Broken Muse is my girlfriend
And Ducky is awesome!

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That is the general nature of things! An equality, a mutal need!

What? To kill and be killed? To love and to feed? That is what you support! There is no equality between the pet and the master.
-Elizabeth & Jason (From The Thirteenth Season)
Old Posted 09-30-2011, 10:01 PM Reply With Quote  
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Ah, really? Didn't plan for it to be that way, but reading it again, I see what you mean, it's better slower. Whoops >.>

And thanks :)
Old Posted 10-01-2011, 12:30 AM Reply With Quote  
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Updated again. I really should post stuff other than my poetry, but I doubt anyone wants to read a six-page story.
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Default   #12   DarkForbidden-Love DarkForbidden-Love is offline
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In 'underwater' you forgot to capitalize i in the last line. Nevermind this then It the second word in. I found this part "knees bent in the to not slip," I'm not sure if you ment it this way or if I'm just not getting it.
Sorry for nitpicking your work but I so like the new poems. 'Punch' was funny even if not you normal style.
Puppy to Asami
Gallagher is Nursy~
Broken Muse is my girlfriend
And Ducky is awesome!

Quote:
That is the general nature of things! An equality, a mutal need!

What? To kill and be killed? To love and to feed? That is what you support! There is no equality between the pet and the master.
-Elizabeth & Jason (From The Thirteenth Season)
Last edited by DarkForbidden-Love; 10-01-2011 at 06:43 PM.
Old Posted 10-01-2011, 06:29 PM Reply With Quote  
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Fixed; it now reads "in the effort to not slip". My recent poems don't have any capitalization, except for Punch. Dunno why.

And thanks again >__<
Old Posted 10-01-2011, 06:41 PM Reply With Quote  
Default   #14   Quiet Man Cometh Quiet Man Cometh is offline
We're all mad here.
The second one is irritatingly familiar but the precise answer isn't coming. Shot in the dark and say Johnathan Swift?
Old Posted 10-02-2011, 07:30 AM Reply With Quote  
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Your shot was amazingly accurate >.> -hugs- Yeah, Swift, an assignment last year.
Old Posted 10-02-2011, 01:04 PM Reply With Quote  
Default   #16   Quiet Man Cometh Quiet Man Cometh is offline
We're all mad here.
Heh. He's the first one I thought of when I think sarcasm, so I suppose it was a shot in the dark against someone talking ;). "The Lady's Dressing Room", perchance?
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