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As I seem to notice, your poems are a slog to the mind until hitting the last few lines.

I get some of the references but I'm not always sure of the context. Either I don't understand them enough, or you are mixing metaphors and I am unfamiliar with one side.
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Default   #306   Gallagher Gallagher is offline
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here and then gone
disintegrated carbon stirred by divine wind
the form and void of a nesting doll
the flayed skin of better philsophers peeling away
this is my favorite part of this one.

something about the imagery for this one just clicked in my brain in a good way and also i relate to literally being a living emptiness that only exists in tangible form thanks to a carefully crafted layered cake of lies and self-delusions


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a sphere crushed by failing imagination
thoughts like love and murder boiled into tedious dreams
every version of oneself cramped in a single brain
this bit is also good and literally me







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As I seem to notice, your poems are a slog to the mind until hitting the last few lines.

I get some of the references but I'm not always sure of the context. Either I don't understand them enough, or you are mixing metaphors and I am unfamiliar with one side.
But I tried so hard to make it simpler and more approachable. :(
Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
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Default   #308   Gallagher Gallagher is offline
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don't worry suze, i'll never understand anything you were going for and continue to shove my own uneducated meanings onto your work with or without your consent







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Quiet Man Cometh Quiet Man Cometh is offline
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But I tried so hard to make it simpler and more approachable. :(
Oh it's highly approachable! I'm just too lazy to google.
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Default   #310   Espy Espy is offline
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My brain is in no state to read that at the moment, but I may have gotten unreasonably excited at the Planck constant.
Na wszystko jeszcze raz popatrzę
I pójdę nie wiem gdzie - na zawsze
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I'm so happy someone appreciates that. :|
Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
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Default   #312   Suzerain of Sheol Suzerain of Sheol is offline
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For Luke

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Brain's been pretty bad lately due to... things... and that one really resonated with all the bad shit.

...Man, I'm so tired.
Na wszystko jeszcze raz popatrzę
I pójdę nie wiem gdzie - na zawsze
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Default   #314   Suzerain of Sheol Suzerain of Sheol is offline
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Qualia

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Default   #316   Quiet Man Cometh Quiet Man Cometh is offline
We're all mad here.
The old thoughts of a dying hat...

Thus begins anomaly.

Apparently.

I'm okay.
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Shekinah

Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
Old Posted 03-04-2019, 02:15 AM Reply With Quote  
Default   #318   Espy Espy is offline
Wanderer
Suze remind me to never look up your vocab again

because my brain went “psilocybic, that sounds familiar, I wonder what it means”

and suddenly mushrooms

in my mycophobic brain
Na wszystko jeszcze raz popatrzę
I pójdę nie wiem gdzie - na zawsze
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Suzerain of Sheol Suzerain of Sheol is offline
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I should probably add content warnings on these...

Although I don't know if I would have caught that one honestly. Sorry Espy.
Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
Old Posted 03-05-2019, 02:52 AM Reply With Quote  
Default   #320   Espy Espy is offline
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nah's fine, my fault really
Na wszystko jeszcze raz popatrzę
I pójdę nie wiem gdzie - na zawsze
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