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.rousium · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:03 AM

Yes, I called myself a genius.

Dang! It feels nice to feel good! *hugs*

Pisces · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:07 AM

Aww! I hate when stuff like that happens! Are you able to get it all out now?

.rousium · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:14 AM

No, lol. I'm so scatterbrained today. It's gonna be a miracle to get this assignment done.

Focus! Argh!

Pisces · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:15 AM

You can do it! Focus focus focus! =D I'm rooting for you!

.rousium · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:19 AM

Okay! This is it! Help me make it better?

The idea of static; a sudden pop and it’s gone but then it’s back, over and over its back and it does this repeatedly. Always. The idea of stagnation; a pond overgrown with algae. So many questions about what lies underneath. Even more questions about what’s next. The article we’ve just read would like to explain and clarify some things in regard to Milton and his style of writing. Many would claim him to be a static and stagnant writer. However, after reading the article one can walk away grasping a more intricate look at the man and his works.
Much strategy is employed by Milton. Be it choice of words, choice of style or, choice of topic. He also, with a certain sense of regularity, employs the action of non-action. In this choice he creates a sort of dilemma for his readers. What happens next? When will it happen? Who will make it happen? We want answers and we want them in as clear and precise a manner as possible. Milton seldom grants his readers this wish. Instead he leaves traces and hides morsels around every corner. He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s hidden, very cleverly for you. That which could only be his treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind. You embark on the journey with preconceptions which he very nearly never grants but upon arrival; you find that the journey has taught you something and that the hills and valleys were there for a reason other than sheer annoyance or worse yet; lack of humility.

Remember, it shouldn't sound like there's an opinion here, just stating what the article is about.

Pisces · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:24 AM

I like it! In the first paragraph, it should be "...of static; a sudden pop and it’s gone but then it’s back, over and over it's back and it does this repeatedly." In the second paragraph, I would combine the two sentences: "Much strategy is employed by Milton." and "Be it choice of words, choice of style or, choice of topic."

Other than that, I think you've got it dead-on.

.rousium · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:26 AM

Oh my! Like I got my comma's and semicolons all right?!

.rousium · 12:33 AM

This one part is bothering me. The second sentence..it needs to start better.

He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s hidden, very cleverly for you. That which could only be his treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind.

It almost seems like it could be a massive run on sentence. I don't know. Maybe it should be A treasure instead of That which could only be his yadda yadda..nah

here!

He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s very cleverly, hidden for you. His treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind.

edit.

He entices you to continue and to keep digging because if you do you will find what it is that he’s very cleverly, hidden for you. His treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind.

lol

Pisces · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:36 AM

Oh! It's good. That second part, although it sounds fine in our everyday language and I know how you want the infelction on it, for an MLA paper it's still a fragment of a sentence. I would but a dash where the period is so it reads: "He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s very cleverly, hidden for you - his treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind." That way, for the sake of MLA, it's grammatically correct. =) It's sounding wonderful though! You're gonna rock this.

.rousium · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:40 AM

Thank you. <3 I wuv you.

I really do. I'm always thankful for you being there. <3

Pisces · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:44 AM

<333 I'm glad to help and to be here for you. It's the least I can do for you being there for me all the time. <3

.rousium · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:47 AM

You're just special to me. :)

Alright! Now to figure out the citation part of this jibber jabber.

Pisces · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:49 AM

Ewww. Lol. I really do hate MLA. Ugh. It's so obnoxious.

.rousium · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:50 AM

I agree! All the technical stuff..blargh.

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/07/
An Article in a Scholarly Journal

Think that would do? ..and it would be the same for both papers, yeah?

Pisces · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:54 AM

Yeah, I definitely think that would work. =D

.rousium · Posted 02-18-2011, 12:54 AM

What are you dooooin crazy?

		#210	Pisces MWAHAHAHAHA!
Aww! I hate when stuff like that happens! Are you able to get it all out now? A Fishy and .Rousi Quest Animal Lover? Come join us! Best people on earth can be found at the 10,000 Cat Paws Charity! Gogo super kinspowers flowers and fish react!
	Posted 02-18-2011, 12:07 AM

		#212	Pisces MWAHAHAHAHA!
You can do it! Focus focus focus! =D I'm rooting for you! A Fishy and .Rousi Quest Animal Lover? Come join us! Best people on earth can be found at the 10,000 Cat Paws Charity! Gogo super kinspowers flowers and fish react!
	Posted 02-18-2011, 12:15 AM

		#214	Pisces MWAHAHAHAHA!
I like it! In the first paragraph, it should be "...of static; a sudden pop and it’s gone but then it’s back, over and over it's back and it does this repeatedly." In the second paragraph, I would combine the two sentences: "Much strategy is employed by Milton." and "Be it choice of words, choice of style or, choice of topic." Other than that, I think you've got it dead-on. A Fishy and .Rousi Quest Animal Lover? Come join us! Best people on earth can be found at the 10,000 Cat Paws Charity! Gogo super kinspowers flowers and fish react!
	Posted 02-18-2011, 12:24 AM

		#216	.rousium More More Magic
This one part is bothering me. The second sentence..it needs to start better. He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s hidden, very cleverly for you. That which could only be his treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind. It almost seems like it could be a massive run on sentence. I don't know. Maybe it should be A treasure instead of That which could only be his yadda yadda..nah here! He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s very cleverly, hidden for you. His treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind. edit. He entices you to continue and to keep digging because if you do you will find what it is that he’s very cleverly, hidden for you. His treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind. lol Last edited by .rousium; 02-18-2011 at 12:33 AM.
	Posted 02-18-2011, 12:28 AM

Pisces MWAHAHAHAHA!			#217
	Oh! It's good. That second part, although it sounds fine in our everyday language and I know how you want the infelction on it, for an MLA paper it's still a fragment of a sentence. I would but a dash where the period is so it reads: "He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s very cleverly, hidden for you - his treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind." That way, for the sake of MLA, it's grammatically correct. =) It's sounding wonderful though! You're gonna rock this. A Fishy and .Rousi Quest Animal Lover? Come join us! Best people on earth can be found at the 10,000 Cat Paws Charity! Gogo super kinspowers flowers and fish react!
		Posted 02-18-2011, 12:36 AM

.rousium More More Magic			#209
	Yes, I called myself a genius. Dang! It feels nice to feel good! hugs
		Posted 02-18-2011, 12:03 AM

.rousium More More Magic			#211
	No, lol. I'm so scatterbrained today. It's gonna be a miracle to get this assignment done. Focus! Argh!
		Posted 02-18-2011, 12:14 AM

.rousium More More Magic			#213
	Okay! This is it! Help me make it better? The idea of static; a sudden pop and it’s gone but then it’s back, over and over its back and it does this repeatedly. Always. The idea of stagnation; a pond overgrown with algae. So many questions about what lies underneath. Even more questions about what’s next. The article we’ve just read would like to explain and clarify some things in regard to Milton and his style of writing. Many would claim him to be a static and stagnant writer. However, after reading the article one can walk away grasping a more intricate look at the man and his works. Much strategy is employed by Milton. Be it choice of words, choice of style or, choice of topic. He also, with a certain sense of regularity, employs the action of non-action. In this choice he creates a sort of dilemma for his readers. What happens next? When will it happen? Who will make it happen? We want answers and we want them in as clear and precise a manner as possible. Milton seldom grants his readers this wish. Instead he leaves traces and hides morsels around every corner. He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s hidden, very cleverly for you. That which could only be his treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind. You embark on the journey with preconceptions which he very nearly never grants but upon arrival; you find that the journey has taught you something and that the hills and valleys were there for a reason other than sheer annoyance or worse yet; lack of humility. Remember, it shouldn't sound like there's an opinion here, just stating what the article is about.
		Posted 02-18-2011, 12:19 AM

.rousium More More Magic			#215
	Oh my! Like I got my comma's and semicolons all right?!
		Posted 02-18-2011, 12:26 AM

		#218	.rousium More More Magic
Thank you. <3 I wuv you. I really do. I'm always thankful for you being there. <3
	Posted 02-18-2011, 12:40 AM

Pisces MWAHAHAHAHA!			#219
	<333 I'm glad to help and to be here for you. It's the least I can do for you being there for me all the time. <3 A Fishy and .Rousi Quest Animal Lover? Come join us! Best people on earth can be found at the 10,000 Cat Paws Charity! Gogo super kinspowers flowers and fish react!
		Posted 02-18-2011, 12:44 AM

		#220	.rousium More More Magic
You're just special to me. :) Alright! Now to figure out the citation part of this jibber jabber.
	Posted 02-18-2011, 12:47 AM

Pisces MWAHAHAHAHA!			#221
	Ewww. Lol. I really do hate MLA. Ugh. It's so obnoxious. A Fishy and .Rousi Quest Animal Lover? Come join us! Best people on earth can be found at the 10,000 Cat Paws Charity! Gogo super kinspowers flowers and fish react!
		Posted 02-18-2011, 12:49 AM

		#222	.rousium More More Magic
I agree! All the technical stuff..blargh. http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/07/ An Article in a Scholarly Journal Think that would do? ..and it would be the same for both papers, yeah?
	Posted 02-18-2011, 12:50 AM

Pisces MWAHAHAHAHA!			#223
	Yeah, I definitely think that would work. =D A Fishy and .Rousi Quest Animal Lover? Come join us! Best people on earth can be found at the 10,000 Cat Paws Charity! Gogo super kinspowers flowers and fish react!
		Posted 02-18-2011, 12:54 AM

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What are you dooooin crazy?
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