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Arsis_von_Neaera
THIS. IS. SPAR -shot- ... *gurgle*
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Maybe I can help?
Maybe it's a condition, ever think of that? No, no you didn't. You never thought, "oh maybe he's sensitive about his invisible eyes." Maybe it's a skin condition.
"Maybe she was born with it..." | ||||
Posted 01-27-2012, 07:08 PM |
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Asami
Rainbow Goddess
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Okay I'm trying on a phone so it may have typos xD here's what I has so far
Once upon a time There was a little girl Her life was a mess She lived in a whirl Everyone used her For their own little needs Nobody listened To her cries and her pleads Her parents ignored her cries for attention Inside was a storm Of hurt hate and tension She tried her hardest To get through the days But they soon became blurry She lived in a haze Her life spiraled downward Into the abyss The hate and self loathing She just couldn't dismiss She tried her hardest To get through each day That's all I has done right now | ||||
Posted 01-27-2012, 07:14 PM |
Arsis_von_Neaera
THIS. IS. SPAR -shot- ... *gurgle*
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Hmm, the rhythm is nice. I like where its going. The question really is does she overcome or does she falter next? She's either going downward or upward, which way does she go?
Try the word 'dismay'. Maybe it's a condition, ever think of that? No, no you didn't. You never thought, "oh maybe he's sensitive about his invisible eyes." Maybe it's a skin condition.
"Maybe she was born with it..." | ||||
Posted 01-27-2012, 08:17 PM |
Asami
Rainbow Goddess
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hhow about the next part goes
the harder she tried the more they would say how worthless she was she was such a burden. | ||||
Posted 01-27-2012, 08:19 PM |
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Arsis_von_Neaera
THIS. IS. SPAR -shot- ... *gurgle*
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Burden is a toughy. Certain... curtain... blurting...
Maybe it's a condition, ever think of that? No, no you didn't. You never thought, "oh maybe he's sensitive about his invisible eyes." Maybe it's a skin condition.
"Maybe she was born with it..." | ||||
Posted 01-27-2012, 08:36 PM |
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Asami
Rainbow Goddess
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Toying around with this one a bit. Its far from done but getting there
Liquid forming The stains are there Slowly etching new memories into her skin. Burning up its just too much its hard to not give in Sardonic smile Toying at her lips What she would give to start over Crying out Echoing off the empty room Her end was closer | ||||
Posted 06-02-2012, 02:03 AM |
Asami
Rainbow Goddess
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Ive written a few new poems please give me feed back ^^
Turning her back On all of her friends. finding herself At a million dead ends. wrong choices Building up all around. beating herself Into the ground. Remembering all the moments of her life Shes just another girl without a sharper knife. ------- Why is it do you talk to me? What is it do you see? Why do you listen to my every single plea? Why is it that you stick around? Stick with me through smiles and frowns? And through all the ups and downs? Though lately I have felt alone Like my happiness was just a clone of the real me you have not known. I wonder what you would think of shiny scars shining pink And all the tears on the brink So I must ask once more If anything I do you abhor And if helping me is a chore? I wouldn't mind if you'd go away leaving me alone like a stray Your happiness, I would not sway. ------------- Beauty like a fallen leaf Beauty stronger in its grief falling faster towards the ground Never making a single sound. Waiting for the wind once more To pick its dead weight off the floor surviving even though its dead Surviving because that's what it dreads. Beauty here and beauty there Its beauty is what makes it rare a single leaf falling slow Beauty no other has to show.
Last edited by Asami; 08-05-2012 at 02:55 PM.
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Posted 07-30-2012, 12:44 AM |
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Natsunaine
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*read them all* I want more they power my muse ewe... *holds the poems like smeagol* The precious must have the prescious ewe... I absolutely loved all of these I cant even pick my fav... there all so amazing and touch the heart Your talented hun :-). I would post my poems but no one has even looked at my songs yet XD
"Cause I've been falling apart in the pouring rain" "I'm waging war on myself. A captive causality" "" "Traded a merciful heart for a murderer�s brain But now I curse what's in my head Because I can't stop seeing red" | ||||
Posted 07-30-2012, 06:17 AM |
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Natsunaine
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haha no problem ^-^ i think i might get my post deleted though no ones looking at it so no real point in havin it up :P
"Cause I've been falling apart in the pouring rain" "I'm waging war on myself. A captive causality" "" "Traded a merciful heart for a murderer�s brain But now I curse what's in my head Because I can't stop seeing red" | ||||
Posted 07-31-2012, 02:04 AM |
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