[littl3chocobo]

for me and a1ice

[A1ice]

So can I call ya' 'Big Mama'? (┌ ・ 。 ・ )┌

[littl3chocobo]

XD call me 'bastian'


though before i post my reply i will share with you a proper version of your last post, this is where i generally find out if my partner is one i keep<3

[A1ice]

Bastian?
Makes me think of 'Sebastian'.

Also, what?
I think I misunderstood.

[littl3chocobo]

red is where i have added, blue is where i have altered, i can explain why if you have any questions, sorry though that this is the only way i know how to help, my grandmother is an english teacher and my mom is ocd(like me) so we are a family of 'do it right or do it over' XD

It seemed like the tent was getting packed. he wondered if there Was were there even that many people in the small town they lived in. Finding it hard to believe that people from the next town would come over just for this circus show, Nick shrugged it off.

Checking his phone, the brunette silently made a small wish hoped the show would start soon. He knew he shouldn't stray from home for too long...

[littl3chocobo]

offering you a red-pen correction of your post to test your mettle and see if you are serious about rping(i am very serious about it. i feel it should be as well written as a book from the library)


and it is his name XD i wanted a symbolic name and what better than one that is a summery of the plot?

[A1ice]

Cool, I gave permission to do such, and you didn't force it on me.
I took it into note, thanks.
This will help me get more of a feel of what style you like.

I say this with no ill intent, but don't expect me to change my whole style, okay?
I know you most likely not want this, but I promise you I cannot format to a 'library book' format.
I will try to be more clear, since you stated it was hard for you to read, however. ( ･ ◡ ･ )

Also, nice pick for the name, it's nice.
Adds a nice detail to the supernatural theme.

[littl3chocobo]

no worries~ it would suck if i just rp'd with myself these are just guidelines on how to make a more consistent post XD


also, about 5'5 he is the second tallest and is the oldest at what seems to be 18, no facial hair, his hair is; http://1.bp.blogspot.com/-UrZuIMQYZt...style-2010.jpg in chestnut and his skin is a little darker than olive, think nut-brown but not from sun. he has gray eyes though at this distance that is not relevant since yours would not be able to see though he has a very large white smile. he is a bit gangly though it is not from malnutrition he is simply thin. he is dressed like an acrobat not a ringmaster though he has the hat and cane and i would think they all have gold in their costumes but the rest can be whatever. his siblings do not all look like him though the littlest sister really did used to be his sister and does look like him

the first act is a dog act, there will be trapeze artists and french clowns and horse-riders, you may gloss or detail what you'd like just know they are all perfect. there are no flaws though by the end there will only be a couple people there. as the show goes on souls are consumed

[A1ice]

Glad to know you get what I'm saying~. ( ･ ◡ ･ )

Also sweet~, sounds like a real looker.
Replying now~.

[littl3chocobo]

he has his charms XD though i am sure he is only good looking if you like that sort to begin with hahahaha, i read something once in a fanfic that stuck with me 'she was very cute for a child composed mostly of brown'

look waht i just made too; http://tenchibaka.deviantart.com/art/Forthel-369547400

[A1ice]

I like those kind of looks, so eh, guilty.
Also nice~, very well made. ( ･ ◡ ･ )

Can I ask for a favor though?
Can you not comment on my profile about the roleplay, you made this thread so we can chat about the roleplay here, so just post it here.
I'll get to it soon enough.

To answer your question; yes I am trying to right in current tense. Or any tense that will be correct when the time comes.

[littl3chocobo]

so i need to write in current tense? crud this will be hard. i need time to reply since i write exclusively in current-past tense


it is generally frowned on to make too many double posts and triple posts are not allowed dear

[A1ice]

I can go past tense (if you want), also why must you use current tense?
I don't care what tense you use, as long as it makes since.

Also, PM me, yo~.
That would work, yeah? ( ･ ௰ ･ )

[littl3chocobo]

sweetie, i am having a hard time reading your words

i need it to be consistent so that when i have to go back and reread something it will make sense, if the tense switches out several times within a post it becomes confusing and to have neither of our posts being in the same tense is doubly so

if i say jack goes to the store and gets a package of cookies and a carton of eggs it makes sense to say he is at the store right now
if i say jack gets to the store and got a package of cookies and a carton of eggs it makes sense only until i need to know if he is still at the store or if he has gone already and come back
it is further confused if you say jack get to the store and got cookies and gets a carton of eggs, it is no longer certain if he is getting things now, if he already has gotten things as well as we no longer know how many cookies he has/is gotten/getting

consistency in writing leads to context and without consistency your partner is left guess as to what you meant and that is not good. i do not think it is fair to either of us if we have to spend an hour trying to figure out what has been said or worse, have to just guess and hope we chose correctly


on a side not though, you really need to make sure you are using the correct words, i know it is easy to get words like sense and cents and since mixed up orally but written they throw a sentence into confusion when not spoken aloud, especially when there are several other homophoneal errors to me a sentence with enough errors turns into a captacha

[A1ice]

I don't think we should roleplay together, I think I'm too casual for your style. ( ･ ◡ ･ )
Sorry, but I feel like I'm writing a English paper when I post and that is what I don't want. Sorry you kinda' get the bad end of this, but I just ain't feeling it.

Thanks for trying and putting up with me, though~.
I would love to still have chats with you, but roleplaying, I'm too sloppy for you.

[littl3chocobo]

oh good lord X'D i was just asking for a polite way to say i don't think we should rp together and i was told to say 'i am just not feeling it' X''D that is too funny

no, i understand. when we rp i feel like i am correcting my baby sister's homework. i know the right answers to make it into something wonderful but i feel weird stepping on toes to make it happen and i also feel kind of old XD

i am glad you want to play with me and after reading your work i think i know someone for you; http://trisphee.com/forums/member.php?u=3189 you have a similar level and both can write about as well and she is desperate for a good rp. pm her and you can prolly get a good rp or two out of her<3