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Suzerain of Sheol Suzerain of Sheol is offline
Desolation Denizen
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On Earth As It Is In Heaven

Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
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Default   #274   Quiet Man Cometh Quiet Man Cometh is offline
We're all mad here.
Took me three stanzas to decide you had a rhyme scheme going. Not sure I'm all that fond of it. It's different for you.

I notice this running theme of things, elevated things, being beaten into existence. I had a thought, but now I'm not sure. I was about to ask what came first: the essence beaten into shape or the thing that is attempting to forge it, but now I'm stuck on the nature of the "thing" and I may have gone and confused myself. I wish that sounded more academic. Give me a minute...


Quote:
infant omniscience balanced on a needle
And is this a reference to the angels on the head of a pin?
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The last couple stanzas made me...uncomfortable. ...I'm also having a weird semi-shitty day, so that might have contributed. Agreeing w Quiet on the rhyme scheme. It's a bit odd and sometimes feels forced.

....also the title might have made me giggle a bit, having gone to catholic high and all.
STONEWALL WAS A RIOT

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Default   #276   Gallagher Gallagher is offline
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that's not a rhyme scheme, that's a joke







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Well, ouch.
STONEWALL WAS A RIOT

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Default   #278   Suzerain of Sheol Suzerain of Sheol is offline
Desolation Denizen
Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
Old Posted 07-08-2017, 01:37 AM Reply With Quote  
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Default   #280   Quiet Man Cometh Quiet Man Cometh is offline
We're all mad here.
I can't find the picture. Assume there's a tiny dog here beneath a giant depression rock that is thinly propped up by memes and video games.
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Default   #282   Suzerain of Sheol Suzerain of Sheol is offline
Desolation Denizen
Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
Old Posted 07-08-2017, 01:48 AM Reply With Quote  
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Okay but actual serious question -- do memes not break the two-word limit rule for posts :|

Also -cautious eyeroll-
STONEWALL WAS A RIOT

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Default   #284   Suzerain of Sheol Suzerain of Sheol is offline
Desolation Denizen
Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
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don't you live in america or something? the people in charge don't have to follow the rules







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Default   #286   Espy Espy is offline
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....Okay actually, let's not go there.
STONEWALL WAS A RIOT

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Default   #288   Quiet Man Cometh Quiet Man Cometh is offline
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Originally Posted by Suzerain of Sheol View Post
[B]this was the meta-moment
the ur-instant of confluent gravity
the genesis of God
infant omniscience balanced on a needle
bleeding out the cosmos
beaten until it was conscious
I do like this part here; this bit of God-birth, especially when compared with the satirical image in my head of the actual purpose of angels dancing on a pinhead.
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