[Suzerain of Sheol]

Suppose I should actually say something here. ;)

The way you put your sentences together shows a lot of creativity -- they're not just your run-of-the-mill 'this happened, then that happened' descriptions; they actually build an atmosphere just with the way the words are arranged, and lend a distinct voice to your narrative. You might be surprised how rare it is to see that. So good job. :)

I think that's one of the things a lot of aspiring writers miss, that when you think about building character, the way the story is actually told can go a long way toward establishing their personality, especially in 1st-person. It's something I really like to see, hence, impressed.