[Kaderin Triste]

I mean, I'm okay with rambly and short paragraphs to an extent but like...this woman breaks up something a person is saying or thinking into multiple paragraphs. For no reason. She has random page breaks in the middle of chapters. For no reason. She skips vital information when we need it, only to add it a page or more later on.

I've never actually read your nano stuff (if I recall the plots/genres of them just don't appeal to me), but I'm 99% sure it'd be better than this.

I'm sure I've already said this, but it looks like she typed it out, ran spell check and said, "okay, good enough! Let's slap a cover on this!"