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DarkForbidden-Love
Person, what Person?
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In 'underwater' you forgot to capitalize i in the last line. Nevermind this then It the second word in. I found this part "knees bent in the to not slip," I'm not sure if you ment it this way or if I'm just not getting it.
Sorry for nitpicking your work but I so like the new poems. 'Punch' was funny even if not you normal style.
Puppy to Asami
Gallagher is Nursy~
Broken Muse is my girlfriend
And Ducky is awesome!
Quote:
That is the general nature of things! An equality, a mutal need!
What? To kill and be killed? To love and to feed? That is what you support! There is no equality between the pet and the master.
-Elizabeth & Jason (From The Thirteenth Season)
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Last edited by DarkForbidden-Love; 10-01-2011 at 06:43 PM.
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Posted 10-01-2011, 06:29 PM
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