[Quiet Man Cometh]

I like it, but you're right, there's some glitchyness about the middle, I'd say at the end of the fourth stanza. There are bits and pieces that I think could be editted out, and it's more those pieces that are causing the issues I think, rather than anying important being missing. I feel the poem is all there but has some loose threads that need trimming. :)

And being someone who often edits her poems three or four times over, writing evry rendition down, I say have at it. :D