[Fey]

Okay, as a consumate RPer I'll let you in on at least the things that make RPs look iffy in my eyes. Feel free to take it with a grain of salt...

1)Plot
~~If you don't have a posted plot to start with it's hard to get an idea of what the point of the RP is. Yes, many a great rp is just shooting from the hip, but to get new people interested you need to present an idea that gets their imagination going.
~~If you do present an actual plot don't let the play just trudge along, do stuff to urge it down that 'path'. I've left a LOT of rps because I felt like I was dragging the plot along behind me like a dead horse.

2)Characters
~~If you're running the RP, or at least a cofounder, accept the fact that you might have to play some NPCs or play a character you might not be 100% comfortable with. This goes back to #1 and helping the plot along.
~~If you're joining an RP make a character that would actually JOIN the rp. I've seen so many 'anti-social/loner/emo/quiet' RP characters made and I always want to go 'but why would they even JOIN this??'. Don't make the other players fight to KEEP you in the game. Yes, you can play a loner, or an antisocial hermit, but give them a REASON to be in the group. And then PLAY like they have that motivation.
~~Ubermnensch characters are only good if you're doing a GOD campaign. Real 'people' have flaws, weaknesses; mary-sues and gary-stus just make it less fun to play with.

3)Posting/Posting order
~~While most people haaaaaaaaate posting order I find that it helps keep everyone 'in the loop'. Once an RP is three people there NEEDS to be an order for people to go in so that one person doesn't get left behind. If it's more than three, it's the only way to keep everyone on the same page and prevents 'god moding' characters.

4)RP Etiquette
~~Accept your fellow RPers feedback about a plot. You may have a GREAT idea, but if someone points out a flaw, roll with it. No one says you have to change the over all idea, but make sure that Mac truck won't fit through your plot hole again.


Uhm, that's all I can think of right now...those are usually all my major pet peeves...
I've not gone to look at your RP, so I can't give you specific tips right now, but I'll go look and see what feedback I can give you :)