[gremlin]

So! I should perhaps skip the whole flashback/dream about what had happened to her? Allow the story to go on and during the entire story the readers find out more about her instead of finding out all about it at once? Should I perhaps keep the whole hint that something horrible has happened to her, but not reveal it? I think that would make someone want to read more to find out, right?
Thank you for the information.
I'm going to fix it up a bit then, the whole comma situation. No one has told me that yet and I really appreciate it. I never knew. Sometimes I do get worried that a sentence can be too long or short... so I get a bit mixed up!