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Serra Britt
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Oh, a couple more suggestions, while I'm thinking of it. The spot before the attack on town, when Tristam and Orec are talking, Granny is still wandering around. She actually got run over when Horyuu ran in, you may want to either make her stationary or if possible remove her from the house for that scene. Also, in the beginning of the flashback, there was a cut back to the house for Amilia to say one line. Since the scene doesn't change (it goes right back to the King's bedchamber) it might be better flow-wise if she just said her line in the scene, as it's apparent it's a flashback and she's narrating.
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Posted 06-14-2011, 11:20 PM