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Quiet Man Cometh · Posted 05-31-2011, 01:34 AM

'Tis a short little thing. The fragmented style is somewhat fitting but it could be sharper in my opinion, though not entirely sure how it might be adressed. Perhaps use it less or add some different punctuation?

I like the image of the couple and the stars, and the significance of the stars to Connor but the second to last paragraph is a little hard to follow in the beginning.

Are there companion pieces to this or is it a stand alone work?

		#2	Quiet Man Cometh We're all mad here.
'Tis a short little thing. The fragmented style is somewhat fitting but it could be sharper in my opinion, though not entirely sure how it might be adressed. Perhaps use it less or add some different punctuation? I like the image of the couple and the stars, and the significance of the stars to Connor but the second to last paragraph is a little hard to follow in the beginning. Are there companion pieces to this or is it a stand alone work? Tea?
	Posted 05-31-2011, 01:34 AM