[Ana]

Thanks for the input. ^^ I'll have to re-read it a few times to take everything into consideration but I can definitely see the points you're making. I actually do have plans for Aria that, I feel, help differentiate her from he-who-spawned-1000-good-aligned-Drow XD Dialogue is definitely an issue for me and something I know I need to work on.

I like the way you described my style as overly adverbed. I think you hit it on the head. I knew pretentious wasn't quite right to describe it and your observation helped me really focus on what I need to work on and clarify my issues.

As for her views that don't seem to mesh with her Drow upbrining, most of them come from another influence in her youth that I realize I should refer to earlier so that those kinds of things make more sense.

Thanks again for your critique. I really found it helpful in identifying areas I need to work on while still encouraging me to keep working. ^^