[Pisces]

Oh! It's good. That second part, although it sounds fine in our everyday language and I know how you want the infelction on it, for an MLA paper it's still a fragment of a sentence. I would but a dash where the period is so it reads: "He entices you to continue and to keep digging and if you do you will find what it is that he’s very cleverly, hidden for you - his treasure, a valuable and ultimately inexplicable journey through his mind." That way, for the sake of MLA, it's grammatically correct. =) It's sounding wonderful though! You're gonna rock this.