[Odessa]

~Naritai you ni nareba ii jan~

I see what's wrong. The part on the right is his left shoulder, but there's not enough indication of where the sleeve is to indicate the angle. Also the V of his shirt is farther to the left (his right) than the reference image, which throws the perspective off even more. Does that help?

~Shinpai shinakute ii~

eta: Also his hair covers up his neck so you can't see where it attaches to his shoulders, so that hides another point of reference. (It kinda looks like his neck isn't quite connected in the right place anyway. It should probably move the same way the V-neck moves.)