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Gallagher · Posted 02-09-2018, 04:27 PM

it's been 7 months

no one cares about you anymore

anyway, i'm a big fan of the pacing of this one. the start of "divest" 3 lines, "divest" 3 lines, sets up an expectation that quickly falls apart as the number of lines get shorter and sound more frantic, then suddenly lines upon lines are dumped like overflowing thoughts and desperate hands trashing all of the subjects away. then, the breakdown into single words becomes a beautiful grasp at the last remnants to be destroyed.

my favorite line is "A dark wet mask on a decapitated puppet that does not consent"

i give it a solid uuhhhhhhh 82.8 out of 86.7

Gallagher It Won't Stop			#291
	it's been 7 months no one cares about you anymore anyway, i'm a big fan of the pacing of this one. the start of "divest" 3 lines, "divest" 3 lines, sets up an expectation that quickly falls apart as the number of lines get shorter and sound more frantic, then suddenly lines upon lines are dumped like overflowing thoughts and desperate hands trashing all of the subjects away. then, the breakdown into single words becomes a beautiful grasp at the last remnants to be destroyed. my favorite line is "A dark wet mask on a decapitated puppet that does not consent" i give it a solid uuhhhhhhh 82.8 out of 86.7
		Posted 02-09-2018, 04:27 PM