Espy
Wanderer
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#275
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The last couple stanzas made me...uncomfortable. ...I'm also having a weird semi-shitty day, so that might have contributed. Agreeing w Quiet on the rhyme scheme. It's a bit odd and sometimes feels forced.
....also the title might have made me giggle a bit, having gone to catholic high and all.
Step in front of a runaway train
____Just to feel alive again
â•â•â•â•â•â•â•? ?•â•â•â•â•â• â•â•â•â•â•â•â•? ?•â•â•â•â•â•
Pushing forward through the night_____
Aching chest and blurry sight
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Posted 07-08-2017, 01:29 AM
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