[Salone]

Rinny mate, I don't think anyone's intent was to be mean or nasty. They were asked their thoughts on the story at hand and delivered. While it might not be what you wanted to hear, they're simply participating in the dialogue they were asked to enter in to. So far everyone has been quite civil.

This is an opportunity. You said yourself that you wrote this in 2012. That was four years ago, and both the storyteller and the way they tell stories has grown in that amount of time. You've shown us where you were, now is your chance to show everyone where you are now, how you've cultivated and refined your style of writing.

Please don't take it as harsh criticism designed to stifle your voice. The people of Trisphee are a (mostly) creative bunch, and enjoy differences and exploration of creative styles. Some have different avenues that they like to explore, and not all of them have interests in every vein of of writing, but I can guarantee you that no one here wants to stop you from picking up a pencil (or keyboard) to tell a story.

I mean, let me tell you about my first real story that I ever wrote. It was dumb. I thought I was the hottest thing, I was going to be so revolutionary. I had an ongoing thing with 50k words and climbing.

And then someone read it. It was getting less than stellar feedback. And instead of taking that feedback and being able to admit where I was weak, I got teary eyed and deleted it and never went back to it, and from that point I never tried to write seriously again outside of roleplays or what have you. I could have tried to prove the detractors wrong, but instead I proved them right by never having the guts to write again or to attempt to roll with their critique and produce something better. I failed. I shut off an entire avenue of expression that I am sure I have suffered for.

Don't make my mistake Rinny. Use it as fuel to make something better.