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Quiet Man Cometh · Posted 11-16-2013, 05:04 AM

The rhythm isn't the best, that's true, but I like the ending. Maybe if you tried writing it as free verse? I have nothing against rhyming, I like it, but it feels a little forced in a couple spots.

Just my opinion.

		#120	Quiet Man Cometh We're all mad here.
The rhythm isn't the best, that's true, but I like the ending. Maybe if you tried writing it as free verse? I have nothing against rhyming, I like it, but it feels a little forced in a couple spots. Just my opinion. Tea?
	Posted 11-16-2013, 05:04 AM