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Natsunaine · Posted 03-04-2013, 03:27 AM

Hm, Well you told me to look and give my opinion so let me start..(please do not take offence I'm giving my honest and blunt opinion)

First of all Your explanation of the RP, Is very little detailed.
Your plot is a bit dry. Why do the assassin's want to rule the world? What do the clans/guilds have to do with the story? What kind of powers are in the story? What time line? What races are in your story? Um.. Im sure if i gave it more thought I could think of more.. I'm going to link you to one of my more thought out rps for an example..

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Hm, Well you told me to look and give my opinion so let me start..(please do not take offence I'm giving my honest and blunt opinion) First of all Your explanation of the RP, Is very little detailed. Your plot is a bit dry. Why do the assassin's want to rule the world? What do the clans/guilds have to do with the story? What kind of powers are in the story? What time line? What races are in your story? Um.. Im sure if i gave it more thought I could think of more.. I'm going to link you to one of my more thought out rps for an example.. "Cause I've been falling apart in the pouring rain" "I'm waging war on myself. A captive causality" "" "Traded a merciful heart for a murdererï¿½s brain But now I curse what's in my head Because I can't stop seeing red"
	Posted 03-04-2013, 03:27 AM