[Quiet Man Cometh]

Okay, so I did read your passage there and I think it's pretty good. I've seen the idea of the fates used before but not in quite that way. There were only a couple small areas that felt cliche to me, this line here for instance:

"Nothing more was spoken for a while, save for the voice that continued to echo hauntingly through them."

feels fairly generic. To "echo hauntingly" I think get used a lot. That's the only real negative thing I have to say though, so far. :)