[Quiet Man Cometh]

I like this one too, though again, I think the writing cold be better. One of the things to watch out for when writing free verse is to arrange it so that it feels like a poem, and not merely prose with line breaks. I'm not sure if there is a method for doing that. I just experiment.

I wonder if that piece wouldn't work just as well if it were written as a piece of microfiction.