Suzerain of Sheol
Desolation Denizen
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I find that the ad-verbs weaken it considerably, they add a vagueness to the language that really doesn't belong in poetry. Just me, but reading it in my head skipping over them, it sounded a lot stronger.
Cold silence has a tendency
to atrophy any sense of compassion
between supposed lovers.
Between supposed brothers.
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Posted 10-08-2012, 09:56 PM
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