[Suzerain of Sheol]

Besides agreeing with everything Galla mentioned, I'll add one other thing about the way you've presented these. And hopefully you'll suffer me a brief contextual anecdote for illustration purposes.

You see, my father purchased me an expensive collector's edition of My Dying Dride's album, Evinta, which I had long treasured for the poetry of its lyrics. However, upon opening the lavish, elaborate companion book to the album to look them over, I noticed... several errors, mostly typos. Despite my attachment to the lyrics, I can no longer listen to or read them without thinking of those errors. They have literally ruined one of my favorite albums for me, coming from such a high-quality product that way.

Now, obviously this isn't a deluxe masterpiece publication you have here, but the point still stands: I can't personally get anything out of what you have posted here, because the typos and misspellings are simply too distracting. I always feel bad telling people this, but it's a hard truth that careless errors like that make it look like the writer doesn't take their work seriously or value it enough to polish it up, so I inevitably end up coming to the conclusion, then neither should I.

But, I must stress, I am both supremely critical of writing of any kind, and have very specific tastes. My opinion should be taken in context of that, and, as such, probably isn't of much relevance to what you're trying to achieve. But, this is the writing forum, and all I have here to judge is the lyrics themselves, as writing.