[Illusion]

Still dry, it takes to long to describe actions. And like all other events, you spend to much time explaining what the characters are doing. You should be explaining how the event/world is going, remember Trisphee and the story are one, not separate. The story feels like a roleplay that I stumbled upon on while browsing through the RP forum.

Suggestions?
Explore ways to combine the Story with the site itself. (Temporary Banners? Site animation (like a dust storm?). Something! You guys spend so much time on story, but you never seem to implant the story into the site.
And speed things up, this shouldn't be a novel, nor should it be a roleplay.