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Arsis_von_Neaera Arsis_von_Neaera is offline
THIS. IS. SPAR -shot- ... *gurgle*
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I had to look up Scott Bakker's "semantic apocalypse" first, which may have been a mistake, we'll see when I recover.

My god, that was more brutal than deep fried babies. I felt myself get a little more depressed after that, I think I need some chocolate bon bons now. I might go curl into a ball and cry myself to sleep. *snuggles a teddy bear with teary fearful sorrowful eyes (that I don't have) and starts sucking his thumb*

No, really, that was brutal. The point was clear, very straightforward, and again, written fantastically. I have to question whether your really just some famous writer playing games with me or whether your genuinely sharing these with me. Have you ever published anything?

And also, I liked this piece because it has a particular rhythm to it. It feels like it was written to a ball room dance; a very unhappy one. There are a couple lines in particular that I really appreciate:

"just an atheist's consistency,
mere entropy made manifest."

"A maze of simple solidarity,
amazed at serendipity."

These lines are very pleasant to the tongue.

I really, genuinely enjoy your literature. If you were a published writer, I would wholeheartedly support your career.
Maybe it's a condition, ever think of that? No, no you didn't. You never thought, "oh maybe he's sensitive about his invisible eyes." Maybe it's a skin condition.

"Maybe she was born with it..."
Old Posted 01-27-2012, 12:07 AM Reply With Quote