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So, "like a puppet" seems very personal to you. "unnamed" 2 was what I was talking about. The unnamed one can take two different perspectives, both being outward, allowing the reader (not the writer), to really understand the perspective and kind of put themselves "in your shoes". "like a puppet" has a very sentimental feel, and a very personal view to it. It's the kind of poem that makes me feel as though I shouldn't dare put myself in your shoes for I really don't want to.

The second unnamed poem was more outward, "like a puppet" was very inward, but both take on a kind of dual meaning, which is very awesome.

And so, I really enjoyed "like a puppet", but I really enjoyed of it because it very much so captures you and puts it in words. It's a situation that can be related to others, but has such a sentimentality that it can't easily be duplicated. Its deeper emotional ties allow the poem to reflect on the readers experiences, while leaving a strong of personal sentiment that it can be taken and understood as extremely intimate.

That's the word I was looking for, intimate. "like a puppet" is very intimate. unnamed 2 was ambiguous and general, leaving a shotgun emotional pattern that is highly effective at relating to others and conveying a personal message to any number of people. "like a puppet" was irreplaceable, intimate, and special.

Not that either of your other poems weren't, this one just more so in particular. :)
Maybe it's a condition, ever think of that? No, no you didn't. You never thought, "oh maybe he's sensitive about his invisible eyes." Maybe it's a skin condition.

"Maybe she was born with it..."
Old Posted 01-23-2012, 08:28 PM Reply With Quote