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Forum: Art & Writing 01-27-2012, 12:57 AM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
That was rather interesting. The whole fight...

That was rather interesting. The whole fight scene reminds me a bit of the end of V for Vendetta when he takes on all those guys and gets shot.

The twist at the end was effective, however, I...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-26-2012, 08:39 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
I think Simply Put is strong, but it almost feels...

I think Simply Put is strong, but it almost feels like it's not reaching it's potential. Don't get me wrong, I like it as is, but I think it could be even better. Pretty evocative, though.

The...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-25-2012, 06:23 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
Well, for a really simple suggestion, I'd look at...

Well, for a really simple suggestion, I'd look at every use of the word "arm" and consider whether there isn't an alternative you could use, especially at the beginning where it gets repeated so many...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-25-2012, 05:37 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
Okay, read your story. Running on little-to-no...

Okay, read your story. Running on little-to-no sleep here, so I'm not sure I entirely apprehended what was going on, but the two parts where the narrator is listing of their thoughts were incredibly...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-25-2012, 01:00 AM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
I just acquired Dante's Divine Comedy myself....

I just acquired Dante's Divine Comedy myself. It's sitting on my "to read" pile. Looking forward to that one as well.

And, yeah, you'll have to show me that some time.
Forum: Art & Writing 01-25-2012, 12:48 AM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
Yeah, I really do find his character intriguing....

Yeah, I really do find his character intriguing. I try not to write about him so much anymore, feels like I'm repeating myself, but he creeps in every now and then.

Oh, and Paradise Lost is like a...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-25-2012, 12:38 AM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
I don't actually read that much poetry myself,...

I don't actually read that much poetry myself, beyond what I need to do for school. I *do* want to read Paradise Lost very badly, though, since the Fall of Lucifer story really intrigues me (and...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-25-2012, 12:28 AM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
John Milton, the English poet? Wrote Paradise...

John Milton, the English poet? Wrote Paradise Lost?

Taking a class on him.
Forum: Art & Writing 01-24-2012, 11:03 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
Will read and give feedback by tomorrow for you....

Will read and give feedback by tomorrow for you. Have a good chunk of Milton to work through before the night's out that I've been procrastinating procrastinating all day.
Forum: Art & Writing 01-24-2012, 06:57 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
I do prefer that one, the imagery seems to...

I do prefer that one, the imagery seems to resonate more powerfully and I overall like the flow of it better.

I notice you're rather fond of the word ashes. :p I think every poet has words like...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-24-2012, 06:30 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
And, at your last post, I see. That makes sense,...

And, at your last post, I see. That makes sense, I think, and I have to say, for being an emotional poet, your stuff is a lot more accessible than a lot of such work I've read. You manage to make...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-24-2012, 06:29 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
"My Arsis" has some really evocative imagery, I...

"My Arsis" has some really evocative imagery, I particularly like the first 5 or 6 lines.

I like "In the end of things..." as well, except for the third repetition which, to me, doesn't seem to...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-24-2012, 06:18 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
Oh, I meant to ask, you're obviously a fan of the...

Oh, I meant to ask, you're obviously a fan of the block structure, do you ever try working in stanzas?
Forum: Art & Writing 01-24-2012, 06:05 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
I rather like Words "Don't Hurt", the concept and...

I rather like Words "Don't Hurt", the concept and imagery both seem fairly unique, though the last line feels a little weak to me.

"Soulless Wayfarer" feels... long, which is kind of cool,...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-24-2012, 04:37 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
Out of curiosity, how long have you been writing...

Out of curiosity, how long have you been writing poetry for? And is that all you write? I kind of flutter between poetry and fiction myself, usual focusing on one more than the other.

Since...
Forum: Art & Writing 01-23-2012, 10:19 PM
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Posted By Suzerain of Sheol
Interesting... I'm somewhat pressed for time...

Interesting...

I'm somewhat pressed for time at the moment, so I'll have to come back to these in more detail later, but for now I'll give my initial thoughts.

"Hell Bent" has some clever word...
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