Shouldn't the next part really just be, "...and so the story begins" or something and lead into the rp?

I guess, but I have to make it more poetic than that. XD Maybe something like...

Thus beings our story of the Chaos Knights.

Hmmm I like it, the wording is a little awkward though, at least when I read it. Spoken it sounds okay

It's probably because I used proper grammar and everything. It really bothers me when poetic stuff doesn't use proper grammar.

I like it and give you the thumbs up of love and approval.

It wasn't the grammar, cause it is technically correct, it was the use of our I think. But I dun know who is actually telling the into, so I dun know if it is supposed to be from a knights pov

I dunno. It just seemed like how it should be done to me, like how some people begin reading like, "Our story begins in a far off land many, many years ago" and all that jazz.

Well I honestly didn't read the first part, I think I missed it somewhere. So if it starts out in a knights pov, then it's okie dokie, if not then I think it should be "the story," but that's just a personal preference.

The POV is kind of ambiguous, I think. It could by from a Knight's POV, but then again it could be from someone else's POV just as easily.

Well the ambiguity ends once "our" is used XD, but if that's what you were going for *thumbs up*

XD it can be from squiggles pov the official bard rubber duck of the knights.

I changed it so that it's ambiguous the whole way through. I like the flow better.

XD Dear sweet Anka, he's going to love that title.

There's a rubber duck?

Yup, he's Kami's mortal enemy. I think he's in the bath right now. You wanna meet him?

I think I do...Do I?

http://i269.photobucket.com/albums/j...links/orbs.png

Hmm, I need to chat more again.