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*hugs Ginger*
If it makes you feel any better I don't have a Halloween costume, actually haven't for years because I couldn't afford to get/make one. ^^; |
I made up a creepy kinda campfire story.
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Ah, okay. XD What did they name the pet? :o
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They named a phoenix Steve? XD No wonder you thought it was funny. XD I would have named him Nova. :3
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I like the story, Tam :D
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Well, for one, it mixes Sci-fi with the sort of 50's horror. For another, it has an interesting twist on the nombies (Meant to type zombies, but mistyping left this funny variation - NOMBIES! Nom nom nom). Finally, you leave on a semi-cliffhanger, which often good horror does to various degrees (and bad horror tries to do and fails).
Some "show, not tell" would help, as would splitting up the paragraph to make it more readable (one may help the other). In other words, describe the despair felt at the cries of babes and women shrieking out in terror over the frozen earth shadowed by near-endless nights, until they died away in the morn. Build up the paranoia felt by the farming family, by spoken words. |
Lawtan!! *runs at you with outspread arms* I'm the most ravenous bookworm right now! I need some good crisp paper seasoned with lovely writing and thought your library would be just the place to find some!
*grabs Tam's story, stuffs whole into mouth* Mmm... Tam that was so CUTE! <3 |
*Bows* I bid you to enjoy my collection of public domain books to your heart's content.
*Is glomphed* You are most welcome (Forgive me, but I have been writing, drawing, and listening to old Horror flicks where everyone talks like Vincent Price, Dracula, or screams xD) *Flails* I am drawing the characters for my stories! Yes! Also, would it be bad taste to make a man with a deformed head, and wielding a whip made from a spinal chord...a medieval mechanic, horsemen, and a musician? |
Lawtan, errr, could you show me what you mean?
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I'm working on the first page of my comic... and listening to music on Spotify.
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Umm, well;
That was what I meant. It was not really meant as criticism...more among the lines of "if you wanted to improve on the story...make it more of a short story... |
@Law
That's creepy. ^^; |
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Also, can you imagine writing something up on this? |
I'd sooner use ye old label/sticker device...
Or an actual typewriter... It's the I-Watch of the 1900's |
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